DDLC Playthrough Fandub – Episode 4 (Poet Conflicts and Retribution)

who should I show my poem to first I'm definitely most comfortable sharing it with Saori first she's my good friend after all oh my goodness this is so good so skate oh I love it I had no idea you were such a good writer I think I understand you better than a lot of other people you know so when I read your poem not just a poem it says Sasuke poem and that's what makes it feel extra special like I can feel your feelings in it here's Monica's writing tip of the day sometimes when you're writing a poem or a story your brain gets too fixated on a specific point if you try so hard to make it perfect then you'll never make any progress just force yourself to get something down on the paper and tidy it up later another way to think about it is this if you keep your pen in the same spot for too long you'll just get a big dark puddle of ink so just move your hand and go with the flow and that's my advice for today thanks for listening this is your first time writing a poem right it's just that there are specific writing habits that are usually typical of new writers and having been through that myself I kind of learned to pick up on them I think the most notable thing I recognize in new writers is that they try to make their style very deliberate in other words they tend to make a writing style separate from the topic matter and they form fit the two together the end result is that both the style and expressiveness are weakened of course that's not something he can be blamed for there are so many different skills and techniques that go into writing even a simple poem not just finding them and building them but getting them to work together is probably the most challenging part it might take you some time but it all comes with practice and learning by example and trying new things I also hope that everyone else in the club gives you valuable feedback it's about what I expected from someone like you that's a little blunt well excuse me it's not like I said it was bad it just didn't have okene emotions so basically it's not cute enough for your taste do you want tickets I'll pass I was a little more stressful than I anticipated it's as if everyone is judging me for my mediocre writing abilities even if they're just being nice there's no way my poems can stand up to theirs this is a literature club after all I guess that's what I ended up getting myself into across the room sigh Ori and Monica are happily chatting my eyes land on urine Natsuki a gingerly exchanged sheets of paper sharing their respective poems as they read in tandem I watch each of their expressions change that's keys eyebrows furrow and frustration meanwhile Yuri smiles sadly this language did you say something oh it's nothing Natsuki dismissively returns the pawn to the desk with one hand I guess you could say it's fancy ah thanks yours is cute cute did you completely miss the symbolism or something it's clearly about the feeling of giving up how can that be cute I know that I just mean the language I guess I was trying to say something nice huh you mean you have to try that hard to come up with something nice to say thanks but it really didn't come out nice at all well I do have a couple of suggestions hmm if I was looking for suggestions I would have asked someone who actually liked it which people did by the way say or he liked it and so skated too so based on that I gladly give you some suggestions of my own first of all excuse me I appreciate the offer but I've spent a long time establishing my writing style I don't expect it to change anytime soon unless of course I come across something particularly inspiring which I haven't yet whoa and Sasuke liked my poem too you know he even told me he was impressed by it Natsuki suddenly stands up oh and I didn't realize you were so invested in trying to impress our new member Yuri that's not what I you very stands up as well maybe you're just jealous that Sasuke appreciates my advice more than he appreciated yours how do you know he didn't appreciate my advice more I use that full of yourself I know if I was full of myself I would deliberately go out of my way to make everything I do overly cutesy is everyone okay well you know what I was annoyed his booze magically grew sighs big rest in the Sasuke started showing up Natsuki that's the key this doesn't involve you I told like fighting guys suddenly both girls turned towards me as if they just noticed I was standing there Sasuke she she's just trying to make me look bad that's not true she started it if she could get over herself and learn to appreciate that the simple writing is more effective business wouldn't have happened in the first place what's the point of making her poems all convoluted for no reason the meaning should jump out to the reader not worse than I have to figure it out tell me explain that to her so skate wait there's a reason we have so many deep and expressive words in our language it's the only way to convey complex feelings and the meaning the most effectively avoiding them is not only unnecessarily limiting yourself it's also a waste you understand that right Sasuke well yeah how did I get dragged into this in the first place it's not like I know anything about writing but whomever I agree with they'll probably think more highly of me I do understand where both of them are coming from but being that Yuri there's a bit wiser I think I should really give her an incentive or we're not two kids coming from but then I'll also deal with Natsuki Yuri you're really talented well Natsuki has a point I think that conveying feelings with few words can be just as impressive as well it lets the reader's imagination take over and not Sookie's poem did a really good job at that yeah shows how much you know Natsuki I think that's enough needs to be look what we talked about yesterday was right writing is a really personal thing and sharing it can definitely be hard it looks like we learned that today even small criticism can lead to something pre-heated I glanced over my shoulder zygerria is not ambiguous Lee yeah so you don't need to feel threatened you're a great rider not ski not skis Boise gets caught and surprised thanks for noticing she finally mutters that barely audible URI URI looks at me dejectedly with a face like that I can't help but feel bad for her as well I'm sure that not ski didn't mean everything she said so you don't need to feel threatened easy hey it's not like you need to apologize for me so ski sheesh not ski takes a breath Natsuki glances around the room with everyone stop staring at me unsurprisingly not ski has a harder time with it then she boasted Saori and Monaco look away the thing about your boobs I didn't mean it okay that's all Natsuki looks away avoiding eye contact with anyone well another word past that and everyone's read each other's poems right I hope that it was worthwhile for everyone especially you so skate and to be honest it's a nice change of pace from lazing around we got a little too used to ah so my joining the club was responsible for ruining the atmosphere no I'm not at all I'm not at all there's still time before we go home so we'll all relax for a bit of course besides chatting we do literature related things in the club room so maybe you can take the chance to pick up a book before do some writing after all that's what the club is for I disagree Monica yeah about what that's not the most important thing about the literature Club the most important thing is happy of course well I guess it's why you're the vice president sorry in the end though Monica's right being in the literature Club probably means I can't spend all my time doing nothing but in the end I guess it's been worth it so far okay everyone it's just about time for us to leave how did you all feel about sharing poems it was a lot of fun it was all right well mostly Sosuke how about you yeah I'd say the same it was a neat thing to talk about with everyone awesome in that case we'll do the same thing tomorrow and maybe you learned something from your friends too so your poems will turn out even better hmm I think to myself I did learn a little more about the kinds of poems everyone likes if any luck that means I can at least do a better job impressing those I want to impress I nod to myself with newfound determination don'ts gay we ready to walk home sure let's go say Ori beams at me it truly has been a while since I Ori and I have spent this much time together I can't really say I'm not enjoying it either sorry about what happened earlier what do you mean you know between Yuri and Natsuki does that kind of thing happen often no no no that's really the first time I've seen them fight like that I promise they're both wonderful people you don't you don't hate them do you no I don't hate them I just wanted your opinion that's all I can see why they'd make good friends with you oh you know Sasuke it's nice that I get to spend time with you in the club but I think seeing you get along with everyone is what makes me the happiest and I think everyone really likes you too that's every day is going to be so much fun ah it looks like so Yuri still hasn't caught on to the kind of situation I'm in sure being friends with everyone is nice but does it really need to stop there we'll just have to see what the future holds I Ori I Pat's I or II on the shoulder I said that more to myself than to her but it's easy to use i Ori as an internal monologue sometimes okay yeah let's do this you all right so considering that whole field earlier today with not ski and URI maybe I should write them some poem says me as to try to cheer them up I think I'll start with not ski in that regard that ski seems to like things of the cute type of nature even though she won't necessarily admit it what the vibe that I'm getting so maybe I can write her something like that all right something like use some words like this and if you work like that as well maybe that'll work I don't know what's up with her sour attitude though you have something against me in particular even though I'm actually trying I mean it's not like I'm trying to be a jerk or anything where's it coming from I don't know I guess I'll have to deal with it for the time being also I'm a little bit concerned of yours she looked pretty down also well if we write another poem then I'll write one for her as well all right that should do it another day passes and it's time for the club meeting already I've gotten a little more comfortable here over the past couple days entering the club room the usual scene greets me hi you Sasuke yos I already looks like you're in a good mood today I'm just still not used to you being in this club that's all I see that's a pretty simple thing to get you into a good mood but I guess it's always the simple things with you anyway speaking of which I'm kind of hungry will you come with me to buy a snack no thanks that's don't like you at all I have my reasons why don't we take a look at your purse I Ori why all of a sudden no reason really I just wanted to look at it ah sorry nervously retrieves her coin purse she fumbles with the left and gets it open then she turns it upside down and let's see its contents spill onto the desk only two small coins fall out I knew it I can see right through you sigh Orie that's not fair how do you even know it's simple if you had enough money in the first place you would have bought a snack before coming to the club room so either you're not hungry and wanted an excuse to take a walk or you plan to conveniently forget that you spent all your money so that I would lend you some but there's one more thing you're always hungry and so that only leaves the one option oh hey Bob don't make me feel guilty if you feel guilty that means you deserve to feel guilty I wasn't listening or anything it was just something in my book URI tell Sosuke to let me borrow some money that's don't get me involved like that sigh Orie besides you should only buy what you can responsibly afford and frankly after pulling a mysterious little stunt like that your suffering is fair enough retribution did I just I didn't mean that I got too absorbed in my book I really like when you speak your mind Jerry it doesn't happen much but it hits a fun side of you that's there's no way you could think that well you were right though I did something bad and now I have to accept the Revolution retribution that yeah still coming from you sorry I guess there's a little devil inside all of us isn't there don't let her fool you Saori knows exactly what she's doing after all she told you guys she was bringing me to the club before she even told me but he wouldn't come if it weren't for the cupcakes so I had to trick Natsuki into making them come on give me more credit than that sigh Orie out of nowhere something smacked Saori and the face thing tumbles onto them yes Oh what was a cookie is this a miracle it's because I paid my restitution retribution actually that one almost worked I was just going to eat with you but then I heard you blob all the cupcakes they was totally we're seeing your reaction though Natsuki that's so nice of you I'm so happy jeez just eat it sigh ori rapidly tears open the wrapper and takes a big fight so good mmm so I always suddenly claps her hands over her mouth I bit my tongue you're going through a lot over just one cookie Natsuki takes a bite of her own cookie um yours looks really good to not ski can I try it geez beggars can't be choosers but you know where's this chocolate yeah where do you think I gave you that one Oh fine still I'm really happy you shared this one with me sigh oh he gets out of her seat and goes behind Natsuki then wraps her arms around her cookies Dylan had not ski reaches up to nudge sigh or e off of her sigh or suddenly leans down and takes a bite out of not skis cookie oh did you seriously just do this mouth full sigh or eat rots away to safety URI and I laugh as well Monica can you tell fury where's money anyway good question

2 thoughts on “DDLC Playthrough Fandub – Episode 4 (Poet Conflicts and Retribution)

  1. This song is going to be stuck in my head all day!!!! ^_^ good job bro!

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